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xgrave
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Not finished yet, Give me suggestion please.
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Michael la-Cour
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| Posted: Thu Sep 18, 2003 12:28 am |
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First of all it looks great.
A few things:
Her right arm. There's is something about it that makes it seem glued on there. Like it doesn't belong.
Makes her seem nervous. Unsecure of the situation.
The butterfly also looks like it has been hammered to the wall with a couple of nails (the white dots) 
And you bagground needs more depth.
I really like the colours and her upper body and face. Great work.
I know it's a wip, just stating. Looking forward to the finished result.
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AndyT
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| Posted: Thu Sep 18, 2003 12:56 am |
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Reminds me a lot of bM's style. 
http://forums.sijun.com/viewtopic.php?t=33684
I like it a lot more than the "City of Death" image.
The bufferfly bothers me though. If it's supposed to be flying show it from a different angle.
If not move it further away from the viewer ... and make it more blurry.
Because of the butterfly the composition doesn't work too well.
There are two centers of interest. Around the face and the tendril (is that the right word?) and another around the butterfly.
The areas are competing for attention.
I'd make the butterfly darker or play with the arrangement of the objects
(if that is still possible).
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xgrave
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| Posted: Thu Sep 18, 2003 6:27 pm |
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Thanks for all suggestions,  it looks arm and butterfly have problems,yea,now I try to paint the butterfly again.hoho,thanks everybody.
PS:I am going to watch the bM's work,http://forums.sijun.com/viewtopic.php?t=33684
That's amazing,Great work! |
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xgrave
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| Posted: Tue Sep 23, 2003 1:58 am |
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New update
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Xyster21
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| Posted: Tue Sep 23, 2003 2:08 am |
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Looks pretty nice !
Only thing that I didn't really like too much was the black on both sides of the picture... maybe next to the water fall on the left some greenery instead of black? it's WIP so can't wait to see some more updates.
Maybe work on that reflection in the water a lil more too
Keep up the good works!
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Guy-Incognito
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| Posted: Wed Oct 08, 2003 4:13 am |
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Your female character looks very nice, but she's disappearing into the whiteness of the waterfall behind her. There's a few suggestions I have for you to resolve this.
1. take away the amount of water and make several streams of waterfalls, bouncing off rocks etc.
2. add some shade to her. At the moment, she's not casting any shadows.
3. make the water darker
I hope to see this when it's finished, I really like it so far |
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