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Az.
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 Posted: Sat May 31, 2003 6:15 pm |
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just wondering if anyone can help me out with some crits/suggestions etc...
thanks very much in advance 
Last edited by Az. on Thu Jun 12, 2003 3:32 pm; edited 1 time in total |
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lafolli
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| Posted: Mon Jun 09, 2003 7:10 am |
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Nice! I like the atmosphere.
A couple of comments:
Make some specular highlights on the body... she looks too dry! 
More contrast in the lit area where the beam of light is coming down. Maybe make the light more yellow-green to denote sunlight.
Whats the deal with the branch for an arm? is she supposed to be a coral or turning into a coral or something? Her left arm needs more definition, unless you are going to make it obvious that its some kind or branch or whatever.
More fish! |
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eyalyab
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| Posted: Tue Jun 10, 2003 3:58 pm |
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first of all, its beautiful.
i dont know if im reading it right.. did she get stuck to the bottom of the ocean with her one arm and tried to reach out with the other arm and eventually drouned and turned to a coral? if so, its a sad story, and i think you need to stress out the fact that she's reaching upwards more. her shoulders whould be less horizontal, more vertical upwards. if not, then excuse me, im just sad in general.
all in all, it needs more refining. looks coarse.
great job! |
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CwStone
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| Posted: Wed Jun 11, 2003 7:47 am |
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i think its a mermaid whose arm got bitten by a shark and it didnt grow back right...lol j/k.
i really like this...but like these guys said, more definition/contrast. Have small white flares (not lens flares mind you) on her branch arm and all the places that the light is stroking....but not a lot....do u get wat im tryin to say?
neway its great
gj and gl!
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Az.
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| Posted: Thu Jun 12, 2003 3:29 pm |
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a little update:
I wasn't really thinking of a backstory, was kinda leaving it open to interpretation, but I like your take on it eyalyab
I've added more highlights on the body etc, and added some more fish, I think I'll redo them ones in the bg tho...
Still working on the arm... I'm gonna see what it looks like with bits of seaweed hanging off it etc, I've got quite a bit to do with the coral aswell - I'm trying not to make it look too cluttered etc.
Anyway thanks much for the comments, they're a really big help. Any more?  |
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eyalyab
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| Posted: Fri Jun 13, 2003 5:44 am |
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thanks for liking the story.
i still think it would look more interesting if she was reaching up with the branch arm. right now she looks dull, resting. |
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