[tilokani]

I did a few new pictures recently for a student film, mostly ideas to get the story and film idea clear through pictures. And lastly to improve on my skill as an artist.

This one is particularly one of my favourite, the photo was taken by a friend, done as a group project.



This is a poem, including an opening line for this film.



Last one's a poem, which isn't really a crowd-pleaser.


I'm pretty much on my knees begging for some critiques. Mostly critiques. If anyone has any, please do a little bit of like. (Inform me of them)
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[Metz]

cool stuff, but you have some areas to work on. i think you should concentrate alot on colors, try to get more natural colors even if you're not going for realistic looks.

the first one. i think the face could've been really good if you worked some more on it. the "camera angle" is ok enough, but you've missed abit on the anatomy because of that, his legs doesn't show and that doesn't make sense. the legs should be visible or his tummy should be smaller. just play around with it and you'll figure it out

the second one was ok, but i didn't like the third one very much. cool ideas and all, but you seem to rush into that red thing and i think you'll do better if you experiment abit more.


keep it up man

edit: stupid typos
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[tilokani]

Thanks metz, for the reply

Yeah, I definately need to for more natural colours. The closest I got was on the first picture. And I'll experiment some more for sure. Thanks for your input though.
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