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SteelStorm junior member
Member # Joined: 17 Feb 2002 Posts: 27 Location: Uerth
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Posted: Fri Jan 31, 2003 10:20 am |
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There are alot of things that bug me about this pic and I can't my finger on them all. The color in the forground seems flat, too overall green, don't like the buildings, don't like the swamp/lake thing to the right . . .
Any other suggestions except for the girl? I am not so worried about her, I only have about an hour into her and I was saving her for last.
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Capt. Fred member
Member # Joined: 21 Dec 2002 Posts: 1425 Location: South England
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Posted: Fri Jan 31, 2003 10:55 am |
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I like it more than you do by the sound of things
Maybe yo'd prefer it if the ground was less 'horitzontaly stripey'. You know what I mean? Less 'fore-shortened', a little more overhead.. (?) The camera seems higher then the amount of fore-shortening/horizontaal-stripeyness suggests. |
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tilokani member
Member # Joined: 03 Sep 2002 Posts: 254 Location: Toronto
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Posted: Fri Jan 31, 2003 1:40 pm |
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Or you can be like, adding more of those mountains, cause you saw you don't like the overall green too much. And yeah. The bushes or trees be like, covering the highway or such under the woman be like, kinda out of proportion. I saw be like, give the factory industrial lights, and be like, do shining in the sky. I like the do of the chrome dragon, it be nice. And do like giving the girls some melons. Like, you know, she's kinda flat. And I think a problem be like, the setting is dark in the back, and suddenly light in the front, like a magic show, it's hard to be understood. _________________ girls like shining |
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acidcrys member
Member # Joined: 01 Feb 2003 Posts: 53 Location: Fl
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Posted: Mon Feb 03, 2003 5:47 pm |
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I'm not certain.. but my gut feeling tells me that.. you should go darker with the background - darker and more blue based - like more navyish grayish - thats just a suggestion though.. I don't know if it'll actually make it better.
Something seems a little odd about the building/highway right below her.. I dont know if the angle should be different.. or the shading.. or the distance.. I'm not sure - but perhaps you should mess a bit with that..
I really like the upper left background.. and I think its coming along really nicely overall. _________________ Help me grow. |
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SteelStorm junior member
Member # Joined: 17 Feb 2002 Posts: 27 Location: Uerth
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Posted: Mon Feb 03, 2003 6:24 pm |
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Yeah I agree with all of these comments. The mountains in back are really far off, so they probably should be blued out and perhaps with less contrast.
I don't know about the building in front, if the perspective is off or what, but I do know that the stripey green is supposed to be terraces, and I don't think they are working.
And don't worry, the girl will have 'melons' but not huge ones. _________________ Illegitimi Non Carborundum
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Vive member
Member # Joined: 22 Sep 2001 Posts: 55 Location: vancouver, canada
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Posted: Mon Feb 03, 2003 8:46 pm |
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Presumably the focus would be on the girl and her flying beastie, so I'm not entirely sure the buildings below her should have as much detail as they do. But it's a bit difficult to tell right now since you haven't give the girl and her critter much of a go.
The dragon thingie struck me as remarkably flat. Is it supposed to be some kind of vehicle or is it an actual living critter? If you're intending it to be alive I'd put a bit more flap or curve into those wings to make it look a bit more organic.
I really like the swamp stuff to the right because it's got a variety of colours in it. Maybe trying carrying some of those blues over into the forest parts? |
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SteelStorm junior member
Member # Joined: 17 Feb 2002 Posts: 27 Location: Uerth
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Posted: Tue Feb 04, 2003 12:24 pm |
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The flying beast is supposed to be metallic, so it would be very rigid. _________________ Illegitimi Non Carborundum
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