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Alpha_Meta
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I've lurked around here a bit and not posted much, not having anything worth showing. This one might do it - getting close at least. Got comments or suggestions? I'd love to hear them. |
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Molako_Plus
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| Posted: Wed Dec 25, 2002 1:05 am |
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seems pretty japanese cuz i have no F*ckin Clue wats going on..lol 
other than that i say you have a pretty awesome and clean colouring style.
keep it up!
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Drunken Monkey
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| Posted: Wed Dec 25, 2002 12:22 pm |
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To be honest with you after first 2 frames i can't make anything out.
Nicely colored though. |
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Gygaxis
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| Posted: Wed Dec 25, 2002 8:00 pm |
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indeed Alpha, this isn't your best page to show, as out of context like this (and possibly in context, I'm not a regular reader of ele) it's impossible to follow. Perhaps you should post a page or two with better flow.
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Simoom
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| Posted: Wed Dec 25, 2002 11:08 pm |
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Thong -> Mech Battle, yup, you definitely got the anime/manga thing down pretty well  it looks good, but like everyone else, I really don't know what's happening there besides a girl running in terror from undergarments and and bunch of mechs/streamers filling everywhere. You're line art and coloring are both great though.
edit: why is there a male symbol on her thong? just say no to dickgirls. |
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Alpha_Meta
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| Posted: Thu Dec 26, 2002 12:13 am |
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All the points about pg. 24 being impossible to follow on it's own are spot on. If anyone wants to read the story and get the background you can read the previous pages here:
http://www.extinctionlevelevent.com/consume.html
Composition and lighting have been huge problems for me. I've been focusing more on shading and color. I think I need to refine the way I approach the early steps of a painting. I usually don't hit the lighting/shading at all until I've got the outlines of the figures and such refined. This is bound to be the wrong way to go about it.
Anyone got any suggestions? |
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FFNeX
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| Posted: Thu Dec 26, 2002 12:53 am |
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Okay a few things:
1) I took a look at your site, and pretty much anything and everything in there is better than the one you decided to show us. Any other page in that comic makes more sense than this one. Maybe this one took you the longest to make, but I can't make anything out after the second panel, the other pages are beautiful though.
2) You are extremely good buddy, your art is flat out impressive, I love your colors, they kick major ass. If you decide to make a more popular themed webcomic I have no doubt you'll become the most popular one on the net.
3) I'm not a big fan of the subject matter, not really a crit, just my opinion, I would have an orgasm at a classical not-so-freaky-and-weird story illustrated by you, something like Xenogears or Final Fantasy-like. Frankly I didn't read any of the pages, but the little I read confused the crap out of me and flat out freaked me out lol
4) Don't censor yourself, show us the good stuff Seriously though, I love the way you censored that shower scene with the people holding the black panels.
5) Go get laid dude, you got some sexual issues, I can give you my therapist's number if you want 
6) I so added your page to my favorites, I am officially a fan of your artwork  Keep it up
How often do you update your page? I've been thinking about starting one of these myself but I have little to no free time so I can't update it every day. Plus I want to know how often I should check your page |
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Alpha_Meta
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| Posted: Thu Dec 26, 2002 3:56 pm |
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| FFNeX wrote: |
Okay a few things:
1) I took a look at your site, and pretty much anything and everything in there is better than the one you decided to show us. Any other page in that comic makes more sense than this one. Maybe this one took you the longest to make, but I can't make anything out after the second panel, the other pages are beautiful though.
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Wish I could look at the page through your eyes. I can understand panel panel 5 being confusing, I don't think I made it clear enough that the sword the mech was carrying has unfolded to become a shield. 3 and 4 are less than perfect maybe but I don't think they're illegible. I'll always try to do better, of course.
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2) You are extremely good buddy, your art is flat out impressive, I love your colors, they kick major ass. If you decide to make a more popular themed webcomic I have no doubt you'll become the most popular one on the net.
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I might be a good artist by webcomic standards, but I need to be a good painter by sijun standards.
A more popular comic is a possibility. I don't think it will be a webcomic though. At any rate, I need to get a lot better and a lot faster at painting first.
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3) I'm not a big fan of the subject matter, not really a crit, just my opinion, I would have an orgasm at a classical not-so-freaky-and-weird story illustrated by you, something like Xenogears or Final Fantasy-like. Frankly I didn't read any of the pages, but the little I read confused the crap out of me and flat out freaked me out lol
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You've made a good point which I will no doubt reference in the future. Rather than making another cookie-cutter story I tried to make as original a work as I possibly could, but I'm getting nailed for it anyway. It seems like the only difference is whether I come out broke with an original work or rich with a derivative work.
Decisions, decisions.
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4) Don't censor yourself, show us the good stuff Seriously though, I love the way you censored that shower scene with the people holding the black panels.
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Censorship is one of the comedic themes of the story. It's not only there because many of the readers are minors, it's also there to point out how insane the reach of the censor has become.
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5) Go get laid dude, you got some sexual issues, I can give you my therapist's number if you want
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Very funny. I've signed underwear for girls, have you? And I'm afraid to go near a therapist, would be committed for sure (said jokingly).
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6) I so added your page to my favorites, I am officially a fan of your artwork Keep it up
How often do you update your page? I've been thinking about starting one of these myself but I have little to no free time so I can't update it every day. Plus I want to know how often I should check your page |
The comic doesn't update very often. I'll post the next page here anyway.
But, like you said, I'd be better off doing a more conventional story. More than likely I'll be moving on. |
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