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Topic : "Edgar Allan Poe Sketch - Black Cat" |
Adonai junior member
Member # Joined: 29 Oct 2002 Posts: 18 Location: USA
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Posted: Mon Nov 25, 2002 3:54 pm |
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Its not exactly perfect by any means, but I was wanting to color it in photoshop, and before I did - i wanted to get any crits before I started! please let me know of anything I should change/add.. If you guys have read the story It should make sense.. if not, I'll add more blood on the knife and it'll just look like I'm a sicko..
thanks!!
also - i know some of the lines don't line up properly (namely his left eye, and the door jam at the top) - was going to fix em in PS |
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ejwize member
Member # Joined: 22 Sep 2000 Posts: 56 Location: Brighton, MA
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Posted: Mon Nov 25, 2002 8:06 pm |
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my advice to you is to spend an hour just working on the hands. You'll be glad you did when you're painting later. |
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Deckard member
Member # Joined: 08 Aug 2002 Posts: 120 Location: Norway
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Posted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 1:59 am |
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Sums up homo sapiens all too well I'm afraid. That is plain Evil!. Why not let the man poke his own eye instead of the kitten. (I love kittens)
As for the lineart, to me, it seems to have an perspective problem, and the hands are to big, but other than that, I like it, allthough the motif could have been different.
Keep it up! _________________ "It would be quicker to train an APE!"
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Adonai junior member
Member # Joined: 29 Oct 2002 Posts: 18 Location: USA
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Posted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 6:38 am |
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Hey guys, thanks for the comments.. I would like to stress though.. it wasn't my idea (for the most part) the story I got this from is about a guy who had a pet cat he loved. and one day he came home drunk and just for no reason decided to cut its eye out (basically). its a pretty sick story, and I couldn't help but have a visual of it when I was reading the story.
anyways, I know its not completely correct as far as how everything is laid out and the lines and such, I always do a bit better drawign with the mouse on my puter, so I always draw on paper to get a 'layout' then just fix all the errors I had on it afterwards. (normally perspectives and things outta wack or size or whatnot.) so again, thanks.
ejwize, did you mean that the hands were too big? or that something was wrong with them (besides the right hand fingers being a little strange?) - I was pretty pleased with how the left hand came out holding the knife - thanks again. |
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ejwize member
Member # Joined: 22 Sep 2000 Posts: 56 Location: Brighton, MA
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Posted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 10:55 am |
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The hands aren't bad, but I think they could improve and that would go a long way toward making the image more effective since they are so central to the composition and to the action.
I have trouble with hands a lot myself and I've learned that if I skimp in the drawing phase, they don't usually get much better when I'm painting... so I usually spend a lot of time on hands in the drawing stage making sure to use photo references. Normally, it really pays off. |
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Link_omega member
Member # Joined: 21 Nov 2002 Posts: 54
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Posted: Mon Dec 02, 2002 6:30 pm |
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Poor cat
Ouch that must of hurt
I'd say in my opinion it definetly look better in color orange color cat
would definitly fit the scene. _________________ Thankyou for your time.
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Soak member
Member # Joined: 10 Sep 2002 Posts: 211 Location: Germany
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Posted: Thu Dec 05, 2002 1:40 pm |
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the left trouser-leg seems to flatmake it more "polygon" and erase that line going directly through in the middle or scribble to create 3d feeling |
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Merystic member
Member # Joined: 12 Jul 2002 Posts: 111 Location: Texas
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Posted: Thu Dec 05, 2002 2:11 pm |
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Uh...no offense but this is repulsive! Not the actual art, but just..the concept of popping a poor defenseless cat's eye out is something I could have done without having a visual aid for. I've read quite a bit of Poe's work and I don't recall this (although he did write hundreds of works)...what is the story called? Poor kitty.
But I digress...for now I'll offer my crits on the art and not the subject matter. Agreeing with the general consensus, I suggest a reworking of his right hand (our left). It's as if his entire hand is composed of just fingers. As we know, that's not quite right...just make the shape of the hand around the palm and the back more accurately defined. The fold in the clothes look a bit lumpy, but I suppose that could be somewhat blamed on his drunken state. Other than that, it's looking pretty technically acceptable. I'm not exactly sure that an eye would pop out easily enough to go caroming across the room, but as I said I haven't read the story.
Despite being disgusted, it looks like this peice will turn out nicely. Look forward to updates. _________________ Stay Frosty!
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Adonai junior member
Member # Joined: 29 Oct 2002 Posts: 18 Location: USA
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Posted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 10:20 am |
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hey guys, thanks a ton for the crits and comments, I know the story is kinda sadistic and mean, but I read it (the story is called "The Black Cat" by the way.) and just had this mental image.. I was trying to think to myself, what kind of person could do this, what would his face look like.. what kind of emotion would be shown.. it was more of a study of if i could get the feeling right more than about gory stuff.. but.. can't really get away from it.. its pretty nasty. Just for the record, I have two kittens.. and both of them have both eyes.. but anyways, i thought I'd post an update, its by no means accurate (like the sketch) but I'll take any C&C's again.
thanks a ton.
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