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gArGOyLe^ member
Member # Joined: 11 Jan 2002 Posts: 454 Location: USA
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Posted: Mon Dec 02, 2002 2:01 pm |
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its not finished.. i need help.. c&c please.. |
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Link_omega member
Member # Joined: 21 Nov 2002 Posts: 54
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Posted: Mon Dec 02, 2002 3:51 pm |
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Jag silver lining at her abdomen needs small tweaking to appear to run
along her side. She's a bit zombish looking But fades excellently into her
backdrop. The black eyes perspectively speaking her her right eye.
oh for those that read when I say perspectively it mean as if i was refferring to the person own body and comparing it the object that I'm Critiquing.
As in this case i'm talking about her left eye which perspectively speaking is her right eye...
Once this concept is down then doesnt become confusing.
The upper lip should have a slightly darker shade than her lower lip if you tend to fill in facial aspects. her nose is need of some attention as well.
Just the part above the nostril appears to too far back making her nose
to appear to be extremely narrow.
Most everything else seems to have a very dark and lurking appearance...
COOL in savvy way _________________ Thankyou for your time.
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proper fuel member
Member # Joined: 05 Nov 1999 Posts: 125 Location: sweden, tellus
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Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2002 10:39 am |
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not sure what you need help with, you've defenitely got something going here...
link_omega, spectate before critiquing, the lighting, as i can see it, is dominant from below, which means the upper lip shouldn't be darker, rather the lower lip...
lighting is a bit confusing though, have you considered the direction, gargoyle..?
make her a zombie
i love zombies... |
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Link_omega member
Member # Joined: 21 Nov 2002 Posts: 54
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Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2002 1:07 pm |
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in most cases the upper lip has a natural darker skin tone than the
lower lip...
lighting appears to originate from the foreground upper middle right at an angle towards the chin in which case her arm should be slightly more darker due to the shadowing. Unless your trying for a muted light scene which only the skin tones of the character shines through ![Cool](images/smiles/icon_cool.gif) _________________ Thankyou for your time.
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damppuppy member
Member # Joined: 01 Aug 2001 Posts: 82 Location: San Diego
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Posted: Mon Dec 09, 2002 9:33 pm |
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I don't know if you are intentionally making her back rigid, but I seems too straight to me. You might want to put on a another layer and draft a correction to her posture. Other than that the lack of eyes and mouth has that horror-freakishly disturbing appeal. Her face looks very well done. _________________ Ken Leung, professional amateur, freelance slacker, college student. |
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gArGOyLe^ member
Member # Joined: 11 Jan 2002 Posts: 454 Location: USA
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Posted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 6:28 am |
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Link Omega> thanks i'll fix the silver stuff
Proper Fuel> Thank you .. Lighting is a bit crazy.. but mostly its slanting up wards towards her face. She is turning out to be zombieish
Damppuppy> Thanks .. good point about the back. i'll see what i can do..
I have to add details.. and a BG.
update:
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gArGOyLe^ member
Member # Joined: 11 Jan 2002 Posts: 454 Location: USA
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Posted: Sat Dec 14, 2002 11:42 am |
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Petteri member
Member # Joined: 28 Oct 2002 Posts: 67 Location: Finland
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Posted: Sun Dec 15, 2002 2:44 am |
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I found her muscles around she�s mouth a bit too tight. Now She looks a bit too uneasy. |
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