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rdgraffix · Posted: Wed Oct 09, 2002 7:55 pm

Hi guys and galls, here's the first completed spread for a new comic I'm illustrating:

and a detail:

Let me know what you think ...

Shinobi X · Posted: Wed Oct 09, 2002 8:01 pm

ROWAN! So THIS is wha you been working on!

INCREDIBLE!!

Hey did you ever get my last email, I never heard back....ahh well, great stuff anyways!

Keep it up...love the mood and pacing!

rdgraffix · Posted: Wed Oct 09, 2002 8:35 pm

Thanks Chris,

I'm sorry to hear you didn't get my reply - I'll resend it now.

Yeah, this project has been keeping me damn busy on top of my regular job - but the end result should be worth it. It's a great feeling when you can start to see all the peices finally come together.

Max · Posted: Thu Oct 10, 2002 4:15 am

I LOVE IT !!!!
The colors, the texture, it's incredible !
Would be cool if you could paint more of these.
Please !!!

[666]Flat · Posted: Thu Oct 10, 2002 7:15 am

BRING IT ON, HITMAN! WHEEEEEEEEEEEE!

(/me likes)

Jami Noguchi · Posted: Thu Oct 10, 2002 9:59 am

the cinematic quality is really intense!

can't wait to see it print. the colors create a movie-like mood.

rdgraffix · Posted: Mon Oct 14, 2002 1:14 am

Thanks, I'm glad you all like it.

Do you have any constructive criticism though? I've still got a lot more of these to produce.

oDD · Posted: Mon Oct 14, 2002 6:25 am

i like them, you want c&c ? well

two things:

1. bottom left pic the thing on the right i thing i takes to much attention, could you blur it ?

2. i like the idea about changing whole color of pic. but instead -like you did in the second from the bottom on the right- of making a gradient form one color to another make the whole pic in the color that is combination of two neighbours (?). Do that with this pic i'm talking about and with that in the point number 1.

i hope you understand that. if you don;t like my c&c ignore it.

Tinusch · Posted: Mon Oct 14, 2002 7:59 am

This is incredibly well done. Very interesting and exciting. The loose, gritty feel reminds me a little bit of Max Payne. My only crit would be the 6th frame. It took me a minute to figure out that that guy wasn't the bald one. It seems onbvious in retrospect, but it scenes with more than three characters, I can see it getting a little confusing. But I haven't seen how you handle those, so I can't really comment on it, but as far as this spread goes, it's perfect. Just keep it up like this.

Porkasaurus · junior member Member # Joined: 14 Oct 2002 Posts: 1

Are these suggested action sequences as to be laid out in frames or the actual frames themselves?

If they are final, I think some variation with the size of the panels can help make it more interesting. The panels all share an equal importance right now to the reader. The shot of the bald guy weilding 2 guns is certainly more interesting but it's panel is the same size.

The first establishing shot is cool, it would be nice to see another one for the roof top fight. Maybe an isometric shot of the roof from a far distance, get some other buildings in there.

The 5th shot is hard to decipher. The only point of reference for a character is the badge and I honestly can't find it in any other frames.

I think the last 2 frames can either be consolidated into 1 or reworked. The framing and character pose is too similiar between the 2. Some recognition by the soon to be victim would be nice before guns start blazing. Maybe a buckling silhouette in front of that last frame? Or even just a tight shot on the sunglasses with a foreshortened gun hand.

The shadowing and drawing style are excellent in all the panels

Duracel · Posted: Mon Oct 14, 2002 7:38 pm

Porka: "The shot of the bald guy weilding 2 guns is certainly more interesting but it's panel is the same size."

Size is the same, but the color aint!

Critic: in the 5th frame, the guy in the background is really hard to see .. perhaps you changed the background-skyline so it becomes lighter around the guy for higher contrast.
And, like Tinusch, i took long time do identify what is shown in the 6th frame. :/
It needs a "clear" Symbol ... the police-badge is not enough ... if you could see the half-face or the hand/gun - that'll do!

But the rest is, i can only repeat whats just said, incredible!

and i like the "gradient" in the 7th frame, and i also like the "fixed" size of every picture ... the "doodleedidoo evertime i change my size"-Window is just overused.

And this "fixed" size give the whole comic a more "stylish" ambient. It goes with the "suit and tie"-Guys.

Max · Posted: Mon Oct 14, 2002 11:37 pm

I know, I already said it...but it's sooo COOOL.
More More More !!!!!!!!!