[Berg]

Here are 3 landscapes I did (no reference, I should get on with that, and I will, when i get...TIME...to go out)

(in chronological order)




and a stillife:


I would really appreciate comments and tips on composition, technique, anything. Thanks alot for looking, and a bunch more if you reply

-Berg

[ September 30, 2002: Message edited by: Berg ]

[TossMonkey]

I wish I could sketch at least half as good as that! The first 2 are the best. What paper are you using there?

[silber]

I think they are pretty good,
as you asked for tips, maybe this one could be useful:
try to vary your strokes a bit more;
vary in strenth, depht , size, speed....
The glas for example could be drawen with very fast and cripsy strokes and in some parts (like the bottom or in very distinctive parts) you could darken the stroke. A very fluffy material like a coat or something could be drawn with a more nervous stroke and very lightly.(This is only one way to do it)
Just vary it to get even more contrast in your picture. a good way to learn this is to make quick drawings from life.

Hope this was a help

[ October 02, 2002: Message edited by: silber ]

[Berg]

To TossMonkey: I'm not sure what brand paper I'm using - I get it from a big rack with all kinds of tints in the shop...

Silber: thanks! The contrast is indeed an issue, especially on the stillife. Your tips are a help, I appreciate it I need to draw...draw...arrrr!

//Berg

[egerie]

Umm this may be too late but :

Maybe a thick & thin aproach with the vase might be more interesting ? (fluidity of the line, etc.)
Also, observe how glass defoms the shapes right at the rims.

For anyone looking at a still-life challenge of this kind ; you could have a glass container (vase, glass,..), half filled with water with a spoon and a twig sitting half immerged in there.
It's really neat how we comprehend things out of abstract shapes