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Torstein Nordstrand · Posted: Thu Sep 05, 2002 4:26 pm

Thanks to those who helped me out on this one in the WIP section. I think I have taken important lessons from this. Among many things, the composition seems to "lock" the viewer, I was told I didn't separate fore/middle/back-ground sufficiently, I should do more work on clothes and materials (and underlying anatomy), and pay even more attention to light. I've collected gigabytes of reference, though I seldom use it actively. Must... get... MORE SERIOUS!

Anyways, I'm especially interested in comments on the colour work, to my eyes it now seems alright, to other visions, I hope I suck - it makes improving so much easier to have an area to actively bash on. Please crit if you can. And thanks for listening to the rant!

xXxPZxXx · Posted: Thu Sep 05, 2002 7:24 pm

I really don't know why this hasn't gotten any comments, it is very good. The colors work together well. The only thing is is that the foreground is so blurry its hard to understand what is going on. If you stare at it for a bit you can understand but initially its just a bit of "uhm is this finished"

definitely cool, just needs a Teeny bit more tightening up

-PZ-

GG · Posted: Thu Sep 05, 2002 8:22 pm

I like the color, and the expressions. It's an ambitious comp though. Not sure I know what the BG is. Is it a landscape and shoreline? If so the perspective is off, and the water needs reflected light from the sky. If they are huddled on a hill-side, why is there a neat pile of coins on the ground (which btw looks more smokey than dusty). I think the whole thing has a lot of promise, but a few little quirks are holding it back.

Psionic · Posted: Fri Sep 06, 2002 12:51 am

Looks to me like they're in a cave!! very nicely painted piece

GG · Posted: Fri Sep 06, 2002 7:03 am

If that's a cave, then the object in the upper left is confusing my eye. I guess I was adding it to the BG and trying to rationalize what it could be.

Torstein Nordstrand · Posted: Mon Sep 09, 2002 6:44 am

Hm, seems the picture was more confusing than I thought.

I intentionally left the extreme foreground "fuzzy", to focus on the sitting couple. That was part of my experiment to create depth - which didn't work very well, I think.

No shoreline here, no piles of coinage, it is indeed supposed to be a cave. I can see that the upper left "tent-flap" can be interpreted as a shoreline, though.

Thanks for the crits, all interpretations are constructive. Oh, and there's a new one in the WIP section, have a look will ye?