[Loki]

Wow - don't know why noone has replied to this yet. But anyway - here we go:

First of all, it's a cool image - very clean, cool subject and overall quite worked out.
Here are some things that I see though:

* Composition - the bird and the character don't seem to belong together - it may be as simple as to have him look at the bird - meaning, changing the eyes of him to look in the bird's direction.
The background is getting quite close to the two characters - so maybe to tie all of it together, I'd gradually raise the contrast of the bg as it's getting closer to the characters

* Lighting:
I'm not really sure where the lighting is coming from - that detaches the fg from the bg even further. They have two different lighting situations. One has to change to make the image more homogenous.

And giving the trees in the bg harder edges might help too - and maybe some bushes, mushrooms (haha) and etc. ...
You could even have some gaps in the far bg to have some sky show through, which gives you another space to work with ...

wheee!

my $0.02

Edit:

Just realized that the boy IS kinda looking at the bird - the reason why it doesn't work is that the bird's wing is behind the boy's hand - try just having the wing go over the boys hand - might change a lot ...

[ May 28, 2002: Message edited by: Loki ]

[Fate]

Ryudo's left hand looks like it's inflated, I think if you adjust the shadowy area it would look more normal.

and Skye would look better if his eye was drawn more closer to his beak, in my opinion.

and doesn't Ryudo originally had black hair that stick out in all direction?

anyways I like it

[L99Relm]

I finally made myself sit down and finish this...It think it turned out ok, but there still seem to be some parts of it that aren't quite right. And I still don't have anything near a dynamic facial expression on the guy. Any tips on this? I'd really appreciate any comments, critiques or paint-overs. Thanks.



A close-up of his face...


[ May 31, 2002: Message edited by: L99Relm ]

[L99Relm]

Thanks you two, for taking the time to reply...

Loki: Thanks so much for your help. I'll see what I can do to improve the picture using your suggestions =)

Fate: I do think I need to do a bit more work on the shadow on his hand. I think that I birds eye looks pretty good where it is. I guess his hair could be considered a dark brown...in which case I just made it a bit lighter than it should be.


Would any other helpful people care to comment on the picture?

[L99Relm]

I tried to follow some of the suggestions...Do you think this version is better?



A close-up of his face...

[L99Relm]

Could I get at least one opinion on the new version as opposed to the old?

[merlyns]

that't some improvement maybe a tiney smile well thats jus't an idea but I like this version anyways nice bird your painter also has some good texteur.

-david