[Tatiana]

Comments and criticism are welcome, I'm looking to improve this.


View the close up here.

[ January 04, 2002: Message edited by: Tatiana ]

[LoTekK]

hmm... the perspective of the field of flowers seems wrong somehow... i could be wrong, though...

anyways, i like the concept... and i have to say, your rendering of the cloth is absolutely beautiful! the girl looks oddly familiar, like an actress i've seen somewhere... but yeah, that's just gorgeous... oh, btw, the way her hands are curled make it seem like she's got really stubby fingers with only two knuckles...

anyways, as it stands, the only major problem i can see is the fact that either the landscape or the girl looks somehow disjointed from the rest of the picture... it just doesn't look like she's actually stepping out from that place... maybe it's the coloring, or something, i can't really figure it out... hope any of this is of some help...

oh yeah, the link to the closeup is broken...

[prophet]

I think the grass is actually the slope of a hill and not really an indicator of perspective (you can see the hill top rising back up over HER left shoulder). I'm thinking the "unbalanced" feeling you get from this pic is that the sky runs right to the outer edge of the top of the box, but the grass is inset behind the dress. If, somehow, the slope of the grass was changed and the sky/grass thing was taken into consideration, I believe this piece would be SPLENDID. One idea might be do have some of the grass "pouring" out of the box? The rendering of the materials, etc is wonderful. I've gone on too long...it's late :0)

prophet

[ January 04, 2002: Message edited by: prophet ]

[Sumaleth]

It might be worth making the cast shadow from the white casing on the floor be sharper at the corners of the box. At the moment the shadow is blurry right up to the box which makes it look like it's floating a bit.

Row.

[Frost]

Beautiful work Tatiana. As some mentionned above, I also like the clothing.

The thing which bothers me most is the perspective on the half-open box, when closed, both sides do not meet up. What you could do is draw 2 concentric circles (ellipses deformed by perspective in this case), both centered at the hinge of the box, one for the outer corners of the box, and another for the inner seam of the box. That will give you the range of travel for the white doors... I hope you understand what I mean, I'm too tired to illustrate.

Nice work!
Frost.

[ed] - well, I suppose it's not meant to be a box, but more a cover slid away from the case -- sorry. =]

[ January 05, 2002: Message edited by: Frost ]

[madmouth]

looks fabulous. the skewed perspective is extremely effective oh jesus I rhymed and is disturbing and thought-provoking as well as beautiful. suggestive of magritte but also very unique. great work.

[burn0ut]

love those hands!

[ftgjcf]

thats one of the coolest pic I've seen in a while! I immediately thought Rene Magritte when I saw it, but thats a compliment really. The face, the hand, the clothes.. She is as good as flawless, and the perspective on the boxes does not bother me at all

[Neo-MatrixX]

I would like to have seen more in the background. Perhaps adding a tree and some birds to build a background composition.
That way your eye first sees the girl, than your drawn into the background with the trees and birds.