[Kamal]

Hi All!,

Just finished this illustraiton last night. Actually, I'm still going to go back in there and refine some of the details, but before doing so, I would like to get your feedback, whether it be complementive or constructive. It's all good.

thanks!

Kamal

[Soulfuct]

I think this is really gorgeous.
It has a Dry dark feel...wow...
the moon looks too big though ehehhe

[ December 09, 2001: Message edited by: Soulfuct ]

[Belisarius]

Amazing,

maybe if you put a few people on that rocky ridge? It looks very empty...

[Malachi Maloney]

This is actually a nice piece. The lighting works very well.
Just a few small crits~
1) While the castle and the hill it's on are rendered in a very realistic manner, the mountains behind it seem a little sketchy.
2) The willow tree in the foreground, it's "leaves" seem almost like a really thick concentrated rain storm. =/ I think that's due to the fact that they all fall in a strait line, it seems like too much of a pattern. Maybe, add some leaves/branches falling at slightly different angles. I think that would give the tree a much more natural look.
3) I realize the fire is going out and it's down to a small bit of burning coals, but I think that some of the ambient lighting from the coals could be shown more on the ground and the side of the tree.
4) Is that a person laying beside the camp fire? Now that I look at it, it seems obvios that it is a person indeed. So, no crits there.

BTW~ The moon looks great. And I really like the clearing at the bottom of the hill.

Hope something in my ramblings was helpful. I've seen your 3D stuff (which is very nice, better than your 2D stuff in my humble opinion.), but I never offered any advice before, seeing as how 3D art really isn't my forte.

Keep it up.

Malachi

[topeira]

i think this is very well done. only a few things -
1)the comment about the leaves is true. all look like they fall in the same direction and thatlooks just wierd.
2)i dont understand what is going on near the bonfire. is that a rock? a person? a sleeping back? i dont get it.
3)the mountains on the BG look a lil like whater. too pointy. not jagged enough in my taste.

but basicall this is very very pretty. i ilke a lot

[Kamal]

COOL!
Thanks for your feedback!
That's exactly the kind of stuff I needed to hear.

1) There is a person sleeping next to the fire. You can only see his back. I'll try to do something with that to make it a bit clearer that it's a person. Any ideas?

2) I'll try to fix the willow tree. I actually liked it the way it is but I'll take your word for it.

3) Good idea, I'll make the light from the fire bounce off the tree.

4) I'll see what I can do with the mountains in the background.

thanks guys!

Kamal

[julia]

well, this is so cool. i t totally made me instantly think of steven kings "dark tower" series. anyone read it?? the first one, about the gunslinger in the desert, has the same feel for sure.

[PixHortHiT]

About making it look like a person, If I was lying there I wouldnt want to have the moon in my eyes while sleeping, and not the glow from the fire either, I would be looking up, lying on my back.

Good job, the pic really gives off a feel of tranquility.

[F�anor]

Fantastic atmosphere and excellant shaping of the foreground rocks. This is the kind of thing that I like to see, something that keeps my eye wandering for a while searching out things in the distance.

Two things- the leaves on the willow tree are too...uniformly dense. Even a dense tree like a willow will have open patches and a discerneable internal branch structure. The trunk is fantastically textured, but the upper portions of the tree look like a large upward scuff.

The other critique is pretty anal, but I found the camp ledge unusually devoid of grass and shrubs, which would almost certainly be any place a willow could grow

But the rest is superb

[Kamal]

Hi All,

thanks again for your feedback. Just wanted to let you know that I'm working on some of the things you've all been saying. To prove it I'm posting a more recent image. I've only been able to tweak the mountains in the background. For the willow tree, I think I'm gonna have to re-do the whole thing. Same goes for the guy sleeping.




Feanor, great idea regarding the grass and shrubs. I'll definitely add those.

PixHortHit, I'm glad you picked up on the tranquility aspect of the painting. That was something I was aiming for.

Julia, I'm flattered it reminds you of the Dark Tower series. I'm familiar with the books. My older brother is a big fan. I remember drooling over the illustration for it.

Topeira, Thank for the feedback.

Malachi, thanks for your extensive critique. As you can see I've already started working on the mountains in the background.

Belisarius, thanks

Soulfuct, Thanks

[mk]

the Tree has still a very nice Hair-Cut...

dont like that much... but the rest of the Pic is great!

mk