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topeira · Posted: Mon Nov 19, 2001 4:24 pm

O.K. - i'm teaching a few capoeira groups in israel and i think i want this to be on the back of our t-shirt. i want your crit and opinion please. take a few seconds to tell me what u think - i'll apriciate it much. thanks a bunch. :-)

ZeeroX · Posted: Mon Nov 19, 2001 4:35 pm

Thats cool man. And caporea is a really cool martial art, but if you want something to go on the back of a t-shirt, I would make it more of a 'symbol' and less of a drawing. Like sure, still keep the chick on her hands hurling that guy into the air, but maybe make them washroom signs? Just a thought.

Bilbo · Posted: Tue Nov 20, 2001 5:39 am

that's pretty good..
here are the things that can use some more work ,imo -the skintones are a bit muddy on both characters- perhaps you should introduce some cooler tones to the palette.
the guy's face doesn't seem to match the perspective of the head and his arms seem way too short. (tips of the fingers should reach about 1/2 length of the hip- doesn't seem like he would be able to).
i'd also lose the yellow stroke on the text, i think it hampers legibility.

taff · member Member # Joined: 04 Nov 2001 Posts: 140

<- /me is Amarelo

capoeira is a great sport/m.a., but i am way too lazy.

the right arm is to short!!

taff · member Member # Joined: 04 Nov 2001 Posts: 140

<- /me is Amarelo
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*neeaaaa... doublepost! i am sorry*

[ November 20, 2001: Message edited by: t4fF ]

topeira · Posted: Thu Nov 22, 2001 2:35 pm

thanks. i wanted to give the arm a forshortened look but aperantly it didnt come off well. damn. i'll fix it.

about the skin tones... i agree but im not sure how i fix this. im not certain how do i help make them more vivid.

and the prespective of the face seems fine to me.

thanks for the replys, peeps.

ZeeroX · Posted: Thu Nov 22, 2001 2:47 pm

Something I noticed about the right arm. If you wanted to make it have that forshortened look maybe make the hand smaller, put it noticibly behind his wrist on that arm, right now I think the only reason it dosent look forshortened is because it starts big, gets smaller, then gets big again. Just a thought.

shahar2k · Posted: Thu Nov 22, 2001 10:28 pm

yah, heh if you wanna draw something that'll be on a shirt, dont go for ultra realistic humans unless you KNOW you can pull it off well, instead do something a bit more symbolic, but that you have more controll over..

Saladin · Posted: Thu Nov 22, 2001 11:24 pm

Just one crit, what the heck are they looking at? Focus their eyes on their targets/attackers and the image might make more sense. However it is fairly good, but I also that maybe a logo might be better on the shirt as opposed to something that may come off looking a bit amateurish. Good Luck with your class

topeira · Posted: Sat Nov 24, 2001 6:34 pm

hey all of you. thanks again.
i think that making the palm smaller than it is wont be very helpfull since the differences in the distances between his elbow and wrist are not that big. it'll look weird. i think. i should try it out though.
about their look - absolutly true. i should fix that no doubt. i wanted to do it before i posted but i wanted out on the forum already.
u guys focused on the fact that it might go on a shirt so much that i think u forgot to crit about the pic as it is - a drawing. but thanks a bunch, once more. i am giong to add another light source too and make the females abs less obvious.
cheers.