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Snakebyte
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 Posted: Sat Oct 13, 2001 10:49 pm |
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Well, as you have gathered this is Alshara the Succubus, sister to Koresha (found on my site).
What I would like to know is, is it too dark? Other than that she’s done!
Well the changes are small and probably unnoticeable.....(the shoulders)
[ October 16, 2001: Message edited by: Snakebyte ] |
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Icannon
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| Posted: Sun Oct 14, 2001 12:29 am |
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| not too dark. looks great. |
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The_Anarchist
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| Posted: Sun Oct 14, 2001 6:17 am |
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This is just a comment.
It seems to me that her expression in the closer picture is almost kind? In the form she is in I would think that you whould make her just a tad more evil looking.
Just a thought. |
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Lomi
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| Posted: Sun Oct 14, 2001 2:06 pm |
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| only crit i have is that since she is a succubus, shouldn't she have a more seductive look on her face? |
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Highfive
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| Posted: Sun Oct 14, 2001 5:53 pm |
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Wow, very nice! Great detail, composition and lighting.
Only tiny crits I have are that the image of her on the right could do with more detail around her shoulders. The smooth look does make her beautiful but making her clavicles visible will add a little more realism to her.
Also I think the shapes of her thighs and calves in the left image are a little too narrow for her upper body. The right leg looks a little shorter than the left, too.
Finally, I think the style of the title Alshara doesn't quite fit the composition. I'm really not sure what it is, but I think it might be the direction it runs.
Sorry if the crits are a bit harsh, but I really love staring at this image! It's a superb piece of work.  |
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Snakebyte
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| Posted: Sun Oct 14, 2001 6:47 pm |
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Not harsh at all!
A friend of mine whom is an inspiring writer came up with the name Alshara. He was torn between that and “Talira”.
I remember someone telling me once that her legs were too long so I shortened the left one (our left) and forgot the right leg As for her thighs, well it looks good enough to me; I don’t think it’s worth the trouble of fixing.
As for the succubus thing goes, well, she’s not technically a succubus in the mythological since. That’s just the best description. However, if you did manage to get her in bed you would probably wake up dead |
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Matthias
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| Posted: Sun Oct 14, 2001 7:59 pm |
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| her right shoulder looks weird. actually from the looks of it she doesn't havea right shoulder. its just a corner that melds into her boob. |
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Highfive
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| Posted: Mon Oct 15, 2001 6:16 pm |
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Yeah, a little more muscular detail on the shoulders to set them apart from her chest... and sooo much of her chest you can see, too  |
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