[Akolyte]

Please Critique:

[Dude]

hmm.. something about the left bicep area bugs me, and if you're not really concentrating on it it appears that his right leg (in the back) is actually in the front! (might just be me thought heh) It's like one of the illusions where if you look at it certain ways the contour area on the right leg knee area actually looks like its in the front or in the back

[ June 22, 2001: Message edited by: Dude ]

[Collosimo]

Nice work. It has a few problems though. The anatomy is a bit flawed. Like 'Dude' said.. the left bicep is slighty strange.. not sure why though.. I think it is probably to do with its connection to the shoulder.

The right knee should not be where it is. It should be behind the other leg.. here it looks like the guy really needs to have a pee!

Another problem I see is the composition.

Generally with a portrait or pinup sort of design like this.. you should always leave space in front of the character so that it doesn't look like their about to run into something. They need some space so they can breate.. move forward... etc.

The feet seem to be stuck to the bottom of the frame.. it looks weird.. they need some sort of ground to stand on.. otherwise they float and lose a lot of their believable form.

This really is quite a nice pic. It just needs some work. Some more consideration for composition, anatomy...

Looking forward to seeing some improvements.

[Akolyte]

Thank's for the feedback, I'll keep these things in mind. I might redo this dude

[Dude]

good, don't just forget about this cause it is a pretty cool drawing

[MadSamoan]

I think the problem with the left bicep is that it's shifted too far on the outside of the upperarm and should be located a little more to the inside of the arm. Perhaps you were a little overzealous in showing off his muscles. Also, I would suggest removing the small crease on the inside of the arm where it's bending. It's such a small touch, but I think if you removed it, it would help define exactly where the form a little bit better. It is a very cool drawing especially if you fix the composition, leg positioning and arm.

[worthless_meat_sack]

The colors of the figure are all biased very cool, but the background is very warm.

This would be less of a problem if the silhouette was very strong, but as it is it looks like less of a graphic, so the figure and ground should relate more.

[Gaxar]

Cool, cool...
I think you should work more on defining shadows in this picture, though. Especially on the right leg... the lightning is about the same for both legs, which creates the problem with the right leg appearing to be in front of the left. There isn't really a defined lightsource either, which makes things difficult... how about making the burning trident more, well, burning, and have it highlight the entire character? Just from the top of my head...

-Axel

The liver is evil. It must be punished.

[Akolyte]

MadSamoan: I know what you mean about his arm now, thanks

worthless_meat_sack: That's why it looks funny, thank you for pointing this out. Very helpful crit colorwise

Gaxar: Yeah, I will make sure I have a definitive lightsource next time around, with some serious shadows.

Thanks for the constructive crits...I'm going to redo him.

[root88]

If you're not going to draw a backgroun, I think you should center the pic more. It looks like he is falling off of the page and there is a bunch of blank space at the top of the page.

[Dryfire]

Awesome bro! damn heh, your way up there on my "cool artists that i've talked to online" list good job man.. i love the blue colors.. i gotta rememember to check back here!