[davi]

This is my first character design. I was wondering if anyone had any pointers?

I'm going to mess with him in the picture colourwise soon. Which... would be the first time i've ever tried to colour someting with the the computer... so i'm going to devirgin my self in a couple of feilds with this piece.





oh... i always think of a story line for my characters(yes i used to rpg). So, here's a breif idea of him.

He's a cyberpunk from in the future. He's father was a ex-scientist who worked with building weapons that related to increasing natural functions of the human body. His son was very willing to be involved with his father's work, but the father didn't want his son envolved. So of coarse one day the greedy son when to his father's lab on his birthday when his father was at a birthday bash which was basicly one of the only times his father was out of the lab. So he goes in and grabs his father's newest creation. which was a just a remote connected to a pouch of liquid connected to a tube. The son was fimilar with how his father's gagets work so he knew some scientific work and electrics himself. So he installed his father's newest work to some of his braclets and hooked the tubing up to his vines. He made it so when he flexed his wrist that it would hit the remote and insert some liquid into his vains. He didn't know what the liquid was but he did it anyways.

The liquid caused and extration of some senses and adds what was taken to others. It would increase; heart rate, strength, eye sight, and hearing. It would take away; mental stability and pain. This would cause the boy to become insanely powerful... and insane for as long as the liquid would last in his body.

The boy thought that this was the coolest thing ever, but what he didn't know is that the liquid was a addicitive drug. He had to have it. Once the drug was taken... if the boy didn't take it every 3 days than he could go in seizures that could cost him his life.

The boy ran away from home. The service that the father was working for is now on a mission of search and destory.


yeah. that's it. maybe i should have just drawn the guy and left the story out... but that's not fun. :/

[davi]

oh come on guys... i'm not that bad of a character designer am i?

[Briareos]

You asked for it

Looks like a skater type drawing. Take some more liberties if your going for original character design for scifi type thing. The braces don't looke very scifi, just look like metal spike bracelets.

Draw more science/tech into them.

Are those big skater pants or some kind of kilt? Define that more.

Dunno, nothing really says cyberpunk or future to me. I myself a geek, I know that if there were cyberpunks in the future they would have allot more gadgets, because cyberjunkies ALWAYS have a gadget fetish/obsession.

Also, if he was being pumped with green fluid shouldn't the pigment in his skin be a little greenish?

And lastely, his fore arms are to thick, looks like popeye. Think about the actual muscles that are there and their proportions to one another.



Too much crit here, but oh well.

bleh.

[bustasnipe]

yea.. thats a sk8ter lookin pic if I ever saw one!.. but its cool. I thought that Crit above mine was very well done!

[davi]

thanks, it was very helpful. i'll start doing some different design work for the spikes right now.