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Totally · Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2001 1:09 pm

The painting is very nice, but the underdrawing could use some work.

The proportions of the face are off for the angle their head is tilted. The nose needs to be elongated (quite a bit) and the mouth needs to be moved much farther down. Remember this: the eyes are the middle of the head, the nose is the middle between the eyes and the chin, and the mouth rests on the middle between where the nose rests and the chin.

The nose is also too high of an angle for the rest of the face. Take a look at the under part of the chin. Picture the 2 dimensional plane coming out from that chin. Now, do the same with the nose. Notice how the nose's plane seems almost to be going straight up at a 90 degree angle, while the underside of the head goes up at an angle that is probably about 30 degrees? The nose should be nearly parallel (the angle should be only slightly higher) to that other plane.

Also, you might want to try making that nose rest where you currently have the mouth, and pull down the mouth as well.

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[This message has been edited by Totally (edited March 20, 2001).]

danyi · Posted: Tue Mar 20, 2001 12:32 am

Well, I've been looking at awe on these boards for quite sometime now, and i've concidered posting time and time - thdn I realized I've known Enayla a long time, and she told me to come on over and join you guys, so I decided on more person might not hurt, so here we go:

this is a painting me and my friend Shane did, please comment

neebhore · Posted: Tue Mar 20, 2001 12:45 am

I like the hair, maybe add some shine to it?
Overall i think it looks great untill you look at the left side of the face, needs some work me thinx. I do like it though

danyi · Posted: Tue Mar 20, 2001 12:47 am

you know, i think i agree with you.. actually.. yeh. The left side of the face isn't well defined enough, plus the chin is more male, which i like (cause it is intended to be male) but perhaps the lips are too slender for it.

i just started painting with my friend about 4 monthes ago, so i'm still learning.

Spring · Posted: Tue Mar 20, 2001 1:18 pm

Was it based off of Michael Jackson?

neebhore · Posted: Tue Mar 20, 2001 1:38 pm

^ Now that's just harsh!

travis travis · Posted: Tue Mar 20, 2001 4:13 pm

holy hell that's cool! these other guys can whine, but that's how it honestly struck me as the pic loaded piece by piece. awesome hair. lots of photorealistic tones, the face is a little limp and undefined at points, but I don't care, I like to see pics that really give it a go and this one does

Flexible Elf · Posted: Tue Mar 20, 2001 6:00 pm

I agree with Totally. Also I think the shadow that's falling on her face should follow her contours a bit more. I like the detail of the hair and the background.

-Flexible Elf

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