[Axl]

I posted this a while back and from the replies I got the bottom half of the piece looked flat so I've added a little and hopefully solved the problem.
Tell me what you think?
Thanks, Axl.

[Essobie]

I'll bite.

It's very "Crusader:No Remorse" in a good way. The thing my eye keeps catching though is the chain holding that red cloth on his front. It doesn't have any depth to it like the rest of his armor does.

Everything else looks very cool.

Essobie

[the_monkey]

hey i think i saw this in the wip fourm. its much better. the fire looks very natural, but the color could be a bit darker. the wood thats buring looks sweet, the water looks sweet, and the charaters torso looks really good. the main things i would improve would be the hands and legs. otherwise, great job man.

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[sacrelicious]

Axl, you keep getting better and better. I agree with the above crits, but all in all this is really great.

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[Jezebel]

Ok, here comes my big crit, I hope it's not too long. First off, I think the head and neck looks really awesome! However, from that point down you start to get a little weak on certain aspects of the anatomy.

For instance, his torso isn't long enough. I think his pecs might be too high too. When you lower his waste down, that will result in making his arms longer as well, because generally your elbows fall at your sides. Stand in front of the mirror in that exact pose and make note of how certain areas of your body relate to other areas. Like where is your waist compared to your elbows?

A few things with the armour as well. You might want to define his abdominals some more, just because it will look really sweet Also I think it's important that you give his armour joints, otherwise he won't be able to move. Right now I see now way that he can bend his elbow. I think you could lose the loin cloth thing in front as well, it just doesn't seem to go with the whole look of the guy to me. Maybe if it were there it could be shorter or something... it just doesn't make much sense. It's really long, and it would interfere with his movement, he's not wearing it to conceal his naked body because he's clad from head to toe in armour. So because of the armour there is a complete clash in styles with the loin cloth suddenly there. I just feel the guy will look 100 times more menacing if he's not behind this "security blanket" if you will

The fire in the bg is a great start, however it's pretty yellow. It doesn't really look "hot" to me. Try putting some deep oranges and reds near the top. I like the little sparkly things floating around, they look neato Here's an image from Joe Mad's site that has some fire in it, not how there is a lot of orange/reddish tones and not so much white? Also note how the bg isn't black, it's more of a dingy orange shader, making it look like fire is all around:





Hmmm... I hope this crit helps.

Beth

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[Axl]

Doesn't anyone want to comment on my work?