[tldenmark]

I've just been finishing up this painting for a client, and I'd love to get your feedback before I send it out.

I'm still learning all the cool new toys in PS7.



Now, I know the pose is pretty boring and static, I can't help that. The client insisted he be like that. Here's the sketch I sent them:



But I can do other stuff to improve it. What bugs you about the painting? What could be better?


Thanks!

tldenmark www.denmarkstudio.com

[merlyns]

make the clouds slightly more transparant-ish that's all
besides that verry cool pic I like it good feeling too.

-david

[Torstein Nordstrand]

Lots of nice strokes in that sky. Colours seem nicely balanced as well. Some more colour variation and saturation on his lit spaces might make him more interesting. What's it for, a book cover? Internet site?

Good job = satisfied client

[tldenmark]

Thanks for the feedback Merlyns & Torstein.

When I got up this morning and looked at the painting I realized how much more work it needs. I did some more work on it to unify the colors, bring out the value pattern and get more atmospheric mood (particularly to reinforce the focal point of the guys shoulder/head area).

Here's a slightly revised version, it still needs a lot of work and comments, suggestions, critiques are welcome.




Thanks!

[ August 26, 2002: Message edited by: tldenmark ]

[Usagi Yojimbo]

i kinda liked the first one better,the colours were more interesting especially the old moon

[Torstein Nordstrand]

This edition leaves me with a harsher impression, less life in it, and I think I liked the mellow one more. Of course, it depends on the picture's theme. What is it for?

[tdenmark]

This is for a collectable card game. It is going to be used as a promotional image (definitely t-shirts, probably posters and maybe a card)

[EviLToYLeT]

i liked the sketch much better. it's so much more dynamic with the drapes wrapping around the spear......

the painted version looks really plain...the cape looks a bit wierd because cant see any folds? maybe just my gamma settings though.

[EviLToYLeT]

mmmm....was playing with auto elvels and i cam eup with this cool looking image. hehehe

[4nton]

Nice job so far... it's good that you're playing around with it. You might be onto something with that level tweak.
try adding a layer with a light-to-dark gradient overlay that origins from the moon. that might darken the edges and add more centralized glow.

[mitch]

theres an awful lot of horizontil lines all nearly parallel to one another;the clowds,the mountains,the rock wall,his cape all bisected primarily by his spear at an almost right angle. It seems grid-ish and somewhat boring because of this. All these lines also lead my eye strait from the left hand side to the right and off the page. I think the cape would be a good opportunity to add some variety. The cape is something that bothers me. The wrinkles arnt well understood, I see a flat shape with no indication of the ins and outs fabric in the wind creates. The cape has lateral(horisontil) movement but nothing that moves closer and further away from the viewer. I think the changes youve made are good, but you still need to recapture the original mood and feel you had going on in your first posted color version. Overall its really cool.