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Atherium · Posted: Wed Aug 14, 2002 1:01 pm

http://novemberstar.20m.com/Kalen.jpg

Here he is...well part of him anyway. I need some serious feedback here kids, not sure which direction to take him in.

He is the main character for a screenplay I am writing that is starting to grab some attention.

Let me know what you think.

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Monolith · Posted: Wed Aug 14, 2002 2:45 pm

Yu need critiques for the character or the pictre?

Thrak · Posted: Wed Aug 14, 2002 3:19 pm

It's a good picture, I like it, it looks powerful. If I had to be critical:

I'd say he looks a little off balance, even after you draw in the feet?
I'm guessing there's going to be some sort of glow coming off the hands? It should reflect well off the body armour (or is he naked?)
Maybe the hand in the foreground could do with being a little bigger, it should be larger than the one in the background at least.
I find ears damn hard to draw, so I'm loathe
to say it, but doesn't his ear look a little small? Maybe it should be hidden under the hair? Or a mask or helmet?

I'd like to see the pic when it's finished!

Atherium · Posted: Thu Aug 15, 2002 12:57 am

awsome thanks so much so far you guys I really need this for him, the images I write about are so beyond what I can draw but I'm getting better I think. Keep em comming please

egerie · Posted: Thu Aug 15, 2002 9:13 am

Impressive. Extremely reminescent of Darkness & Co. You might want to rework his right hand especially in the pinky area. Another area that looks puzzling is his right buttock/leg junction. I'm not sure what's going on around there in anatomic terms. Mind the wrists thickness ; if they're both on the sides the one behind shouldn't be thicker than the forefront one. His left eye is slighly higher.

Other than that you got a nice line and I love those little details (elipses, spots and whatsnot).
Can you tell us more on that screenplay of yours ?

Dunno if it's serious feedback but I hope it helps somewhat.

Atherium · Posted: Fri Aug 16, 2002 9:36 am

can't tell you much about the screenplay as to it is copywritten and I may piss a few people off as to the protection around this trilogy is getting more and more out of hand.

I will be posting most of my concept art for it on the boards though, that should give you many clues as to what it revolves around. Too bad I can't draw as well as I can write.