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ValarianROOT · Posted: Mon May 27, 2002 12:01 pm

HI justi something i'm working on and would like to hear what people have to say. I would like to enhance the composition somehow, but am having trouble thinking of something that will help. Please comment and crit. Thanks as always.

JN

Beowulfthefallen · member Member # Joined: 06 Jan 2002 Posts: 147

hm, the scene looks good, but it doesn't look much like Kaneda at the moment. Remember, Kaneda's face is a little bit rounder than that. This person has a very lean face. Also, his neck looks really thin as it is. Kaneda's jacket was orangey-red in the anime, but that's a style thing too

. The bike looks dead on, although turning the windshield into an actual glass pane could add a lot to the picture. Altogether looks good so far! (If it weren't for the character needing to look like Kaneda, I wouldn't mention half of these nitpicky things

)

ValarianROOT · Posted: Mon May 27, 2002 12:51 pm

Thanks. Yeah I'm having trouble with his head and making it look like Kaneda. But when your going from the manga, its a bit hard. Maybe a bit more referencing from the covers would help. I'll get to it.
JN

ValarianROOT · Posted: Mon May 27, 2002 3:19 pm

a bit o work on the 'ed.
Any better?

JN

zak · Posted: Mon May 27, 2002 11:59 pm

zak · Posted: Tue May 28, 2002 12:00 am

i just had some odd pics they might help

ValarianROOT · Posted: Tue May 28, 2002 2:19 pm

Thanks zak. I've just been going off what comics i've got laying around, but these two pics are great.

JN

Motorfish · Posted: Wed May 29, 2002 3:37 pm

I'd suggest you perhaps shrink the head down a bit, and bump up the color saturation a little more, like so:

tek9z · Posted: Wed May 29, 2002 11:54 pm

composition could be a lot stronger.
you should show the clown gang on their bikes
more. also a horizontal composition would be better to show the vast neo tokyo behind them
and to show the surrounding better.
this will give you a more "cinematic" feel to your pic.
also the bike seems a bit off perspective.
made a ruff repaint with the underlaying grid showing... to explain the whole lot.

his face looks allready promising..

ValarianROOT · Posted: Sat Jun 01, 2002 6:39 pm

tek9z thanks. great suggestion and great overapint. I think I have to do some more sketching and re think my comp.

Motorfish, yeah i think your colors and head size are a lot better.

thanks,
JN

zak · Posted: Sat Jun 01, 2002 11:26 pm

youre missin something really important now. all the stickers on the bike! ^__^
other than that the pic is coming along real good, i just think the head is still too tall for the pose he's is. sorry i couldnt say anything last post, but i had a bit of trouble. but yeah, lookin great

Maxmike · Posted: Sat Jun 01, 2002 11:51 pm

Well, it may not look like the original, but since I haven't seen what this character is based from, I can tell you that I like the first (the tall thin one) picture's face alot better. The second one is unnatural, big, and flat. Awesome job so far, I think it could be darker, just about as dark as in that awesome example tek gave. And while the head might stand being a tad smaller, I think that other example's head by Motofish is a tad too small for the body. so meybe something in between.

And wow, tek gave you some awesome stuff to work with

ValarianROOT · Posted: Sun Jun 02, 2002 9:53 pm

Sorry guys, I've given up on this comp. I've started a new thread here: New Post.
I just didn't think I could pull off something cool here. I aslo didn't want to do something that had already been illustrated in the movie. Why illustrate something that someone's already seen, right? Thanks a lot tek9z you're rendition actulally inspired me to move away form this one in search of a more dynamic piece. So, maybe if you guys wanna let me know about the other one and if it really is an improvement that would be wonderful.

JN
P.S. Thanks for the input, I don't want anyone to feel i'm blowing it off. I'm not.