[kryticalerror]

the folds in her cloak look a little too "crunchy"? the fabric looks like a trash bag... maybe if you went easier on it and drew more sweeping flowing folds it would look cool. her hand looks flat. if it's grasping the cloak, it doesn't look in perspective, and if she just pushing it down it looks awkward. the background is making me go nuts, at this phase maybe a flat color or something more indicative of the final would be more helpful. her forhead tatoo is off center a bit it seems. her chin has some strange shading. and i might perhaps work on the design of the handles on her back. and watch the figers, they look a little crooked.

i hope SOME of that helps. nice going for a fresh wacom user. good potential

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[muv bloated]

hello all. well i'll try and skip the evitable introduction, until someother time. anyhow i just wanted to hear some of your opinions or advice on comp, colors especially. i haven't went on to the detail yet, so. anyway here's the wip...



...still sketchy, trying to get the idea out. about 45mins-1hr of work so far.

oh yeah, this is my 2nd attempt with my wacom, so be considerate. :p

[ April 20, 2002: Message edited by: muv the bloated ]

[aColdOldKodiak]

nice picture, I think your color choices are good too. The only thing I had with it was that the face looked really masculine. So I did a paintover and rounded the features to make it more feminine. Hope you aggree with me on this.


[ April 21, 2002: Message edited by: aColdOldKodiak ]

[muv bloated]

kryticalerror: thanks for the crit, yes i must agree the cloak needs lots of work and alot of other mistake linger there and there too. hmmm....the background was experimental, so. also the hand was doing neither...it was just....sorta there. :) i'll try to make it more logical.

aColdOldKodiak: i feared that very thing. i was trying to keep her from appearing too feminine because i wanted to convey her as a long time warrior and less groomed, but maybe i ended up making her too masculine eh? :) thanks.

[Kaete]

I would fix the lighting on her jaw and lips, but please *don't* do anything to that beautiful nose. It makes her look like a gorgeous, unique woman. The cute round nose just makes her look like a common, cute little girl. (No offense meant, Kodiak )

Also --- at the moment the neck looks like a simple cylinder. If you look at a neck, you notice that it's not really all that round. You might want to give it a bit of subtle definition so it doesn't look so round.

Her index finger is kind of crooked.

Love the hair beads and the texture on her collar.