Sijun Forums :: View topic - early stage

Moose · Posted: Sun Dec 16, 2001 11:26 am

there she is. Im wondering, do you all mind the subtle distortions of her body/proportions? is there anything i can do to fix composition at this early stage?

i just need a fresh pair of eyes to check it out and give me some feedback... ive been starin at it for a while, im sure someone out there can pick somethin out

kahboom · Posted: Sun Dec 16, 2001 9:05 pm

<stupid question>where's her right arm, and what's it doing?</stupid question>

Looks good, btw. Show us your progress...

Moose · Posted: Sun Dec 16, 2001 9:21 pm

i battled with the right arm, and im putting it in - i just needed a break from it for a day. right now it is at her side

ill show more progress after my finals, plus i work slow....

thegrandfather · Posted: Mon Dec 17, 2001 12:06 am

Just a few minor things - her hands are very stubby - like a kids hands. and her torso looks odd as it comes down from her chest to her hips, i think the left side of her stomach either needs to be closer to her body, or to come back in on itself.

also it's a pretty pedantic issue, but balancing that would be almost impossible; although it does look kickass...

Moose · Posted: Mon Dec 17, 2001 12:37 am

the more and more i look at that hand, the more and more i dislike it

im fixin that hand, thx for pointin it out though. the stomach: ah ha! its been botherin me a bit... although i want a slight belly, thats what i was lookin for

hehe thx, i just needed 'turn in on itself' and my brian started working again

thx.

its gonna be a little tricky to balance it.... but i need to hone that skill more. thx again, im gonna start painting it here after i finish my finals. (ack!)

Satan · Posted: Mon Dec 17, 2001 12:40 am

Other than the hand, I think the belly/torso needs to curve inwards more (re-iterating the grandfather's comment) - not only will it look more anatomically correct - it will break up the direction the eye is carried in, as at present the straight torso line is parallel to the building edge on the left of the picture.

A useful way to refresh the eye to a picture's composition is to mirror it over ( flip horizontal)

Little Beefucker · Posted: Mon Dec 17, 2001 3:46 am

I don't know if you're sifting through the suggestion box, but I'd just like to say I like it. It's easy to imagine colored it -- in fact that's the only thing holding it back. Color will unify it. And the posture's fine, IMO, since she's correcting balance for those thrusters on her (delicious) legs. Hand fixed yet?

Ooh, one other thing -- given her head angle, and since she seems to be conscious of how she's posed (vis. carefully atop upward thrusters), I'd change the direction she's looking in. Have her looking down and forward, as if she's surveying what's directly beneath / before her.

Just preferences.

Is it a frame from a comic / concept?

kahboom · Posted: Mon Dec 17, 2001 6:26 am

mind if I try a paintover when I get back from w3rk tonight?

Moose · Posted: Mon Dec 17, 2001 6:32 am

bee: her original glare was downward, i changed it for some reason... i kinda like it the other way (the way you suggested) so i think im gonna move it back. hell ill do 2

This is just a concept drawing/exersice/doodle that i wanted to take further

kahboom: go fer it man

id like to see what you do with her

julia · Posted: Mon Dec 17, 2001 7:51 pm

i was wondering about this arm towards us more than the one on the other side. personally i think where her forearm and upperarm meet at the elbow, there seems to be too much of a corner there, especially for her arm to be straight out. make the muscles there a bit more subtle i think, and more curved. but otherwise, very cool