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Basement bound · Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2001 4:09 pm

No comments yet eh?
First of all I think it is a powerful piece and compositon. Areas of improvement would be perhaps some hints of the local colours. Not enough to distract the viewer, but enough perhaps to create depth?(not too sure on that, try it you might like it). perhaps some other environmental additions, like an owl or something simular.
Give us some more detail about the story, that could inspire us. Good luck

JA

Duracel · Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2001 4:29 pm

Yep, just the name of the story will help us to help you

Sukhoi · Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2001 4:57 pm

Very nice job eboy!

Compostion wise I would make the tree taller (perhaps even show its top) to make the kids even smaller and alone (and together), you know to highten the composition but also to enhance the mood!

Suk

eBoy · Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2001 11:18 pm

Hi all.
This is my first post here.
I'm doing this cover-illustration for a childrens book. I did a sketch (posted)from the clients instructions, but I'm in lack of inspiration and need some inputs regarding colorstyling, composition and...well...great ideas basically ;-)
-looking forward to here from you all, and will ofcourse post the image later in the progress...

eBoy

Briareos · Posted: Thu Jul 19, 2001 1:39 am

Very nice lighting, put some kind of animal somewhere in there, something small and undetailed, just to add detail overall.

eBoy · Posted: Thu Jul 19, 2001 2:00 am

woohoo...that was exactly the kind of tips I needed... thank you so far!! :-)
Unfortunatly my server was down for a while...but should be up and running again...
The title for the book is 'The Sword of Wisdom' and it is sort of fantasy / Tolkien-harry potter-ish...but I can't show the sword on the front because that's telling too much I think!
Details about the story >>
The scene on the front is the main character and her sidekick waiting for their two friends who is lost in the river (beneath)..
It is a heavy storm...but I don't think that's coming through too well!
Well...enough said...thanks again all...and keep it coming =)
eBoy

eBoy · Posted: Thu Jul 19, 2001 2:19 pm

Hullo again...
I've now tried to tighten up the composition and did some rough inking...(trying not to be afraid of the big black pencil

I couldn't really make the tree taller, because the puplisher wants the main-character to be recognizable...
Regarding animals, I was thinking of a big flock of birds?!
I've posted the first sketch and the inking...comments on composition (and characters) would be higly appreciated

deadline is closing in...

thanx >> eBoy

BooMSticK · Posted: Fri Jul 20, 2001 1:19 am

wow! This is much more dramatic! Looking great Emil! have you decided on colors yet! For some reason I think stormy grey and blue. Maybe with a touch of green? Looking forward to see further development!
,Boom

Collosimo · Posted: Fri Jul 20, 2001 2:41 am

Hey eBoy, this second revision is great! Like BooM, pointed out it has great drama.

Excellent job on that. You are steaming along now!

badoli · Posted: Fri Jul 20, 2001 5:45 am

Yup! Very impressing...

Main character looks very kewl... if he is that smart in the story, i wanna have a book!

eBoy · Posted: Fri Jul 20, 2001 7:51 am

thanks again...
Boom: "...stormy grey and blue. Maybe with a touch of green" was actually what I had in mind! ...but I'm having trouble with the sky...I'll post a colour sketch tonight!
Badoli...thnx...but..heehee...the maincharacter is a girl really...I think I should make that more clear. She's a boyish girl allright, should be sort of troll like... i've posted a design on her...tell me what you think.
Thnx
eBoy

Frost · Posted: Fri Jul 20, 2001 10:38 am

Great looking stuff eBoy. The lighting from the moon in the sky (in the first pic) doesn't match the angle where the scene is lit from. Deleting the moon from the pic would solve this. Lovely stylish sketches and drafts.