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Hippie
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PostPosted: Wed May 16, 2001 6:52 am     Reply with quote
Ok, I started this image just as a doodle on my lunch break working on the figure. I liked the figure enuf to want a background. Started posting here to get some help, thanks for the responses.

Here is a little timeline of how the piece has progressed.


So from there I started working on this finished piece. Well, not really finished but getting there.


Would love to get some feedback, I know the composition isn't great so don't kill me with that, if you have suggestions would love to hear them.

Thanks
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PostPosted: Wed May 16, 2001 1:00 pm     Reply with quote
The smoke in the backround looks backlit, slightly to the left. Your fatman is lit from the front, which would be okay, if he was also lit a little from the left. IMO.

Royal

P.S. Don't forget his shadow.

[ May 16, 2001: Message edited by: SpiralEye ]
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EviLToYLeT
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PostPosted: Wed May 16, 2001 2:57 pm     Reply with quote
The shapes of the factory building are odd... your edges are extremely sharp on it, and therefore. *gah* Keep in mind that as thing recede more and more...they get greyer and mesh in with the surroundings more and more.
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PostPosted: Wed May 16, 2001 3:06 pm     Reply with quote
his left (our right) foot doesn't align to the ground correctly
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zero21
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PostPosted: Wed May 16, 2001 5:20 pm     Reply with quote
Looking at his thighs, I would have thought he would have to have a huge butt. Would that show from the angle we are looking at?
Just a thought. Looks good though.
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red com
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PostPosted: Wed May 16, 2001 11:13 pm     Reply with quote
thats one ugly dude... cool pic. i rally cant come up with any crit's.. i think he/she/it should be named mr.A tough..
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PostPosted: Thu May 17, 2001 5:52 am     Reply with quote
redcom: thanks, I think it's a guy.

SpiralEye: I haven't forgot the shadow thanks for the reminder though. I see what your saying about the fog will try to fix that.

EvilToylet: I see what your saying still trying to work out would it get grey or more orangeish, is that a word? I always have problems with atmospheric perspective. Thanks for the tip.

Vesuvius: toes should be pointed out more I think, thanks for the comment been so focused on the background and lighting didn't see that until you pointed it out now it is glaring at me.

zero21: good question and I'm really not sure. I guess it could I was going for a very, very fat mans torso. Like rolls of fat, then for some reason I drew the really powerful legs,(maybe from carrying all that weight around). So I don't know if the butt would be buns of steel, buns fo flesh.

thanks everyone for the comments, I will attempt some changes and then repost in this thread in a few days.
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