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Alexei Samokhin · Posted: Wed May 09, 2001 1:39 pm

i want to draw beutiful picture for my ex-girl... and don't want to do something wrong (she is a perfect artist and will see all my wrongs =)

so .. any advice and critycs ?
very need....

zero21 · Posted: Wed May 09, 2001 2:04 pm

I like it, especally the skin tones in the colouring. (I need help in this area hence I am crying over my keyboard as I suck at it)

OK looking at the pose, Heres what I see. (have been known to be wrong so don't take me too seriously) I got the impression that her arm was in bedded behind her back and the breast closest to the viewer looks like its missing. The whole shoulder area closest to viewer looks a bit funny to me.

The other thing that hit me was that This subject seems to have a younger feel. Can't put my finger on it. The innocence or proportions contributing here? what age is the girl drawn intended to be?

Overall I think it's good and will keep an eye out for the finished version, So please post it aye.

synj · Posted: Wed May 09, 2001 5:53 pm

it looks good but if you're trying to impress her you better not put her in dish rags hehehe

dogfood · Posted: Thu May 10, 2001 4:34 am

There is something very cute about this image, but it looks like she's about to fall forward (which is fine if she does so in person a lot). I'm usually not a big fan of hiding arms and hands, but here it gives the figure a feeling of delicacy and shyness. For a more interesting pose, try to counter the hip and shoulder lean (shortening one side of the body, lengthening the other).
As an aside note, I feel few women would feel thankful that their image has quite so large a... well, booty, if you will. It extends a little farther than is necessary. As a last note, when you begin, put down a horizon and refernce it throughout the drawing, noting the perspective and relationship between objects (one foot hidden behind the other when we should see it due to our viewing angle).
Keep it up, there are a lot of nice things about this (but you didn't ask for those).

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Alexei Samokhin · Posted: Thu May 10, 2001 7:30 am

thx for help guys ! soon will show the result :-)

Awetopsy · Posted: Thu May 10, 2001 8:36 am

Hope this makes sense..

-awe

Alexei Samokhin · Posted: Thu May 10, 2001 10:15 am

New version of the picture.
I think she have a good pose .... like i want....

Typhon · junior member Member # Joined: 20 Jul 2000 Posts: 43

The first one looks like a one-breasted paraplegic. I dig the coloring though, very soft tones and they work well.

I like the second on a lot better. The breast nearest to us could use some more definition though.

nightmare · Posted: Thu May 10, 2001 5:48 pm

arms are a little thin. or maybe im spiteful cuz my arms aren't like that

her hip/butt area is still a little big and, uh, round. front arm is kinda curvy. nice pic, i like the hair ribbon thing, looks so cute! i like her face, very model-like

synj · Posted: Fri May 11, 2001 1:05 pm

curves are good but when your arm is curving like that you better go see a doctor because its broken heheheh and her chest is still lopsided but no offense if she really is.

Jezebel · Posted: Fri May 11, 2001 3:21 pm

She looks really cute

My one crit is that you should try not to highlight/shade with pure black/white. Take a shirt or a pair of jeans, drop them on the floor and look at the highlights... you'll see they aren't pure white.

bishop · Posted: Sat May 12, 2001 12:25 am

new version is looking much better.

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