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Jerry
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This is the first page of a comic book I'm doing for fun. It's the first page and it's the first time I've inked something so crits pls...
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Jerry
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| Posted: Sun Jan 14, 2001 10:36 am |
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almost forgot... I still have to finish it with photoshop...
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TheMilkMan
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| Posted: Sun Jan 14, 2001 11:03 am |
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Now this is very amature ..but everyone even A MAD started somewhere. The good thing about this is I can tell what you are drawing and I can look at the pics with no dialoge and tell what is going on..so you have a lot of good elements to this pic. Now the art needs to be a little stronger..just work on shapening up your line work and work on your perportions.
Maybe in the third frame instead of showing a blank terrain you can show a targeting radical from the mech targeting the probe drone? ...anyways that would help to break up those frames...maybe even put the mech out on the edge of the terrain looking out over the vally like a gaurdian....very small on the horizon...in that second frame
You can also add some dynamics to the scene by showing some explosion coming off the probe dron thing...like smoke and fire burning the left over remains...then in the next frame where the mech is holding the gun show smoke coming from the barrel after the mech shoots ..this helps to garner attention to the powerful weapon....little things like that help to create dynamics in your scenes..I used to be an artist on a manga comic....ummm you should pick up books by masumine shirow he is the master of dynamic story telling ,and he is masterful with his detail...good luck
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Jerry
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| Posted: Sun Jan 14, 2001 11:30 am |
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sorry the second frame was suppose to be a night vision goggle like scene... and the third was the same except the probe was shot so the vision was blinded.
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Jerry
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| Posted: Sun Jan 14, 2001 3:32 pm |
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Here's a little update on the coloring job...
Showing little bits? that's a good idea but I don't think the weapon should be that powerfully shown because the guy who destroyed the Glider is from a team named Travelers (bad guys) they're weak and not so powerful, but their leader knows all about the Mechnoshperes (good guys) so there's a little war going on at first...
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TheMilkMan
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| Posted: Sun Jan 14, 2001 8:52 pm |
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| Ahhh that looks a little bit better.......the coloring did help..post the finished vesion when you are done and remember to add explosion flames from the blown up robot... |
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| Posted: Sun Jan 14, 2001 10:58 pm |
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Yo! I went out with my cousin on our lunch brake today and we be haven Burger King chicken sandwiches Yo!
Yo! That shit is nasty yo I just stick to KFC fo next time. Yo it's mo better yo!
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Yo! your drawing looks like my cousins ass. |
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