[Skeezer]

Here's a pic I did a few months ago, was thinking about coloring it, any comments before I dive in?

She's actually a mutant human who lives in a post apocoliptic future that is threatened by a group of humans who have come out of deep storage in Norad two thousand years later than expected. Anyway they're pissed that all these mutants and freaks are running around like they own the place, and they vow to take it back in the name of Humanity. Of course the natives aren't to happy with being wiped off the face of the planet just so a couple hundred humans can blow up the world all over again.

Here it is

[Nex]

looks pretty cool, good proportions and nice face.

the only thing that reveals her as being a mutant is that her right hand holds the sword at a totally impossible angle. Maybe you check the anatomy there again.
(I almost broke my wrist trying to do what she does in the picture )

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- Nex

http://on.to/nex

[phreaknasty]

looks nice. however there are two areas that stick out as problem areas. her hands, and her neck. try to mimic her hand positions and i think you'll find them very uncomfortable to down right painful. try to find a more natural position for them. when you fix her right hand i think you'll also find that your composition will inadvertently benefit because the guard of her sword will no longer contour her head. as far as her neck goes its a bit thin and positions her head as if she were doing one of those eygption dances. i really like the action of the pose it shows your not afraid to push yourself. the body and legs look very good. hope this helps... keep up the good work

[This message has been edited by phreaknasty (edited November 02, 2000).]

[nil900]

Hi skeezer really good sketch. I like the face very much but I agree with nex the right hand is strange. Did you try to draw the sword more 3 dimensional. Now it's exactly shown from the side. Perhaps you should twist it a little making the sword point towards the background (again I don't know how to say that in English).

[Rinaldo]

Hey that looks good Skeezer.
I'm not sure about the grip she has on the sword tho.

[Matt Elder]

OK, first up, the hand. I think you know about this by now so I'll try to comment on something else. For me, the whole pose is a little hard to believe. You have the character on one foot and almost standing up right. I'm having trouble believing the balancing act. The character is on the tips of their toes, in armour with a sword in the position it is in ie the character is carrying alot of weight quite easily but doesn't look like they have the build to do so.

Think about when you see pictures of tightrope walkers. They have long poles to balance and it has a symmetry (ie the pole extends in two directions from the persons hand (one to the left, one to the right). Your sketch has a sword going backwards and nothing to counter balance that.

Maybe you could erase the characters right leg and redraw it firmly planted on the ground. Otherwise make sure the background helps the image to make sense. The character could be jumping in the air (then you would have to have the characters left foot pointed downwards more).

probably doesnt' make much sense but I do like your sketching style and will be interested to see what you end up doing with the image.

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See ya on da flip side
Matt
http://www.mattelder.com

[This message has been edited by Matt Elder (edited November 02, 2000).]

[Jaymo]

Looks very nice, I like it. BUT...wouldn't it be a great shame for an elf to have such short hair? Maybe she got punished...?

[Skeezer]

Oyyy,

Thanks guys for illuminating that right hand.
I guess after havin accepted the image I sort of failed to notice how uncomfortable that would be.

Matt: Thanks for the critique. She is actually kind of in a mid jump or fall. I think what I had in mind was the instant of touch down.

The head placement is sort of off too, so I'll try and fix that.

thanks

-Skeez

[Skeezer]

I painted it. I fixed the hand, although after reading the comments about it, I tried to mimick the pose in the mirror and I could do it. Maybe my wrist is double jointed.

I also shifted the head I think it sits on her neck better now.

Please tell me what I could do to make it better as far as texture and lighting go.



Thanks

-Skeez

[sacrelicious]

Skeezer, do you know the meaning of the word "prolific"? Because you, my friend, you are fuckin' PROLIFIC.

Jeez, I hope prolific means what I think it does.

Looks good!

[Skeezer]

Hey sac, thanks, and yes prolific does mean what you think it means.

I got lots of picks that I want to show, but I don't want to overwhelm. Maybe I should just post more drawings on the same thread.

Hopefully I'll have my website up in about a month or two, then I won't be so anxious about posting. haha, or maybe not.

Later

-Skeez